Talk:Virmire: Assault

I edited this sentence, but it was reverted: "However, they offer some condolences for the loss squadmate however, they are half hearted." While this phrase gets the point across, I feel that the use of two "howevers" in a row makes it awkward to read and, really, isn't proper English. I believe that changing it to "However, their condolences for the loss of the squadmate were half-hearted" has the same meaning, reads smoother and works just as well within the same context. If someone reverts it again, I'll respect that and won't change it, but I felt I should make my case.24.68.137.115 04:37, June 6, 2010 (UTC)