User blog comment:Ygrain/Long Days, Long Nights 3/@comment-4721065-20121001034552

Epic chapter. I'm looking forward to the twist ending, where Connor Shepard, grizzled and down on supplies, kills Toombs to secure his status as the Sole Survivor and the briibe from Dr. Wayne! XD

Just kidding, obviously. Hope you don't get too offended! In terms of grammar, there is this little passage:

Mako’s canon would have done it, but one got upturned as the beast emerged from the ground the first time, and the other was targeted as soon as Adams fired the first missile. (Mako fires shells, not missiles: each shot would take several seconds to travel otherwise.)