User blog comment:SpartHawg948/An Open Letter Regarding Mass Effect: Deception/@comment-1900300-20120203015648

You know, as bad as this book is, it was i think it has one of those plots that was doomed to fail from the start. The main storyline was supposed to be about Gillian Grayson going on a roaring rampage of revenge against Cerberus and TIM. Now lets look at the problems of this:

Well firstly we know what has to happen at the end, so the tension is completely undone. We know TIM, Kai Leng and Cerberus are still active by ME3, so we have no real reason to be invested as we know Gillian is not going to get her revenge.

But more importantly, and the primary reason Gillian was made 18 in the book, is simple. She is a fifteen year girl with autism! How can, as an audience, we be expected to cheer for a child putting herself in mortal danger like this. How do you have a child with autism comprehend the concept of revenge and then express it to the audence in a manner that A) does not strech the boundaries of a realistic depiction of autism B) Desplays enough emotional weight that we buy it C) makes us believe her intentions are real when we are more likely going to thing she has really no idea the lengths you must go to have revenge or the danger she is putting herself in.

Simply put, having Gillian as a secondary character we sympathised with worked, having her as the protagonist simply does not. You need to have more storylines that can stand up as well.